((A few things Menardo:
A. You shouldn't turn other characters into hideous monsters [which I'll fix now]
B. I'd like to help you with your grammar. Please make your next post short [as in 200 words or less] and I'll PM you with some grammar improvements. I don't want to offend you; I just want to help.
C. Remind me why you gave your character 3 unrelated abilities?))

Rawl hated Jake. More than he thought it was humanly possible to hate someone. He had several reasons: he was a liar, he was member of the "5 Families" group which seemed completely unjust and he wouldn't leave him alone.
'Ugh,' Rawl muttered under his breath. He quickly fixed up his clothes and hair before continuing down the corridor. He'd been planning this meeting all day, and stupid Jake had nearly ruined it. But things were fine now. Fine. He repeated this thought through his head a few times. But what if Jake was right? Absurd. Jake was wrong, end of story. He was standing before Xander's door and he wasn't about to turn back and leave without seeing his best friend. He pushed through, and he was instantly glad that he had.
'Xander,' Rawl breathed his friends name. He rushed up and threw his arms around the bedridden boy. He looked so ill. From his arms, chest and head several IV tubes were securely implanted. In the transparent tubes Rawl did not see a transparent liquid, instead the liquid was bright green. What he wondered was whether it was coming in, or going out??
'Rawl,' Xander replied weakly. It took Rawl a second to realise that he wasn't greeting him, he was warning him. He turned a second too late as two hands were laid onto his shoulders.
'DORM ROOM,' thundered a familiar voice. Jake's voice.
Rawl found himself standing in his own room, with all of his roommates present. Everything happened very quickly from here. Rawl twisted on the spot and picked out his battery. But before he could fire Jake had thrown up his hand; threatening.
'What's it going to be Rawl,' he smirked as he spoke the words. 'Whatever this is... it ends now.'
Rawl dropped his hand in defeat.
'Ok I give up. What do you want?'
Jake smiled and dropped his hand aswell, 'Just saving you--'
Jake was far too trusting of Rawl. Something Jake would learn quickly was that Rawl couldn't be trusted: especially if you weren't his friend. Rawl shot a bolt of electricity at the lights. Showers of sparks flowed from the light causing the room to fall into mass hysteria. Immediately after shooting the first bolt he shot a mild bolt at Jake. Intended to stun, not injure. But he had no time to view his affect, he quickly darted out of the room and ran, full speed, down the corridors which separated him from Xander.

((Menardo: I never intended my character to be a monster.))

It hurt to breathe. It hurt to talk. It just hurt. I felt worse than I'd ever felt in my life. Ever since I'd be taken from my friends things seemed to have stopped altogether.
Days lasted for years and pain was a 24/7 thing. I doubt I'd slept more than 6 hours in the past week. But I didn't feel tired. What ever they were pumping into
me was doing its job.
Rawl's visit was the best thing that had happened in, I don't know how long. But he'd vanished. I tried not to believe it, but it must have been my imagination: a hallucination created by my mind to make this experience more bearable. Whatever it was: I wanted it back.
And it did come back.

GUYS!!! i am so sorry i didnt know lol! I do apologise.....

Also about my abilities, they are realted, Jakes father was a healer, his mother a teleporter and the light thing well it just comes with being a healer WHITE MAGIC??? lol kidna connects lol hehehehe

SOS GUYS AND the guy who does Xander do apologise!

ANYWAY MY STORY!!!

Jake was in shock, Rawl electricuted him. He teleported to him room. And thne ripped his shirt off. There was a scar, and a burn, and Jake smiled, he could just heal himself. He placed his hands over his burn and it immefiately healed.

He then knew that he was totally wrong. He had got it all wrong and had jumped to the wrong conclusions. He knew he had to do something. So he decided to teleport to Xander room.

He was in Xander's room and Xander looked in shock at this figure, Jake just smiled and said,

"Hey Xander right? I am so sorry. I got it all wrong. I told Rawl you were something evil but you werent! I got all this information and got it the wrong way. Now Rawl hates me and you probably do to. Are you ok?

Xander did not asnwer he just looked at Jake, with no expression, Jake carried on,

"I know what you are! And you might be in danger! I got it wrong though and i have made Rawl hate me! I will do anything i can to help you."

Xander still did not say anything. Then Jake hard the door knob turn and Rawl was in the doorway. Jake swivvled around and looked right into Rawls eyes,

"Rawl! Please do not do anything, i am sorry! I am here to help! I was wrong!"

Rawl didnt move he just looked with disgust, he then said in a monotone voice,

"Jake! I will hurt you! GO!"

Jake shouted back,

"Rawl! Can you not see i understand what i did wrong? I am sorry! If there is something going to happen, you can't do it yourself! You nned help you need friends... And i know you do not like me but i can help and you and i both know it."

Rawl did not move....Then there was an almighty crash outside.....

Then a few screams of young boys on the ground floor....

GUYS IGNORE ME POST I JUST DONE ALRIT I HAVE ONE WITHOUT MISTAKES LOL!!! I SPRESSED RONG BUTTON IGNORE THE POST ABOVE THIS ONE ARLIT GUYS!!!!

SORRY AGAIN!!!!

GUYS!!! I am so sorry I didn’t know lol! I do apologise.....

Also about my abilities, they are related, Jakes father was a healer, his mother a teleporter and the light thing well it just comes with being a healer WHITE MAGIC??? lol kind of connects lol hehehehe

SOS GUYS AND the guy who does Xander do apologise!

ANYWAY MY STORY!!!

Jake was in shock, Rawl electrocuted him. He teleported to him room. And then ripped his shirt off. There was a scar, and a burn, and Jake smiled, he could just heal himself. He placed his hands over his burn and it immediately healed.

He then knew that he was totally wrong. He had got it all wrong and had jumped to the wrong conclusions. He knew he had to do something. So he decided to teleport to Xander room.

He was in Xander's room and Xander looked in shock at this figure, Jake just smiled and said,

"Hey Xander, right? I am so sorry. I got it all wrong. I told Rawl you were something evil but you weren’t! I got all this information and got it the wrong way. Now Rawl hates me and you probably do to. Are you ok?

Xander did not answer he just looked at Jake, with no expression, Jake carried on,

"I know what you are! And you might be in danger! I got it wrong though and I have made Rawl hate me! I will do anything I can to help you."

Xander still did not say anything. Then Jake hard the door knob turn and Rawl was in the doorway. Jake swivelled around and looked right into Rawls eyes,

“Rawl! Please do not do anything, I am sorry! I am here to help! I was wrong!"

Rawl did not move he just looked with disgust, he then said in a monotone voice,

"Jake! I will hurt you! GO!"

Jake shouted back,

"Rawl! Can you not see I understand what I did wrong? I am sorry! If there is something going to happen, you can't do it yourself! You need help you need friends... And I know you do not like me but I can help and you and I both know it."

Rawl did not move....Then there was an almighty crash outside.....

Then a few screams of young boys on the ground floor....


( My story is 332 words)

No time to post. Just saying I'm so happy this went sticky! Yay!

Hey xxx i dnt understand what u mean by and i quote "....this went sticky! Yay"

LOL explain......

I hope u dnt fink me introducing an attack it so early but i just fort that i got my next part where we go down and get em rite but it was to easy? u know like one mutant or sumin ya? and i go like.... "Rawl?" and u go "Yeah?"

then i go,

"That was too easy!"

the leave it there and see xander or u or whoeva does nxt hehehe lol but that wnt be till U or Artic posts xxxxx

CYAS XXXXXXXXXXXXXx

i am such an arse that was mena be a PM not a public post hahaha!!! lol anyway wnt make a post tonight am out PARTYING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

LOVE YAS ALL

THOMAS XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXx

Rawl, Jake and an under-the-weather Xander were all running down the corridors with mixed feelings of fear and exhilaration. As they ran they heard the looped announcement which had been running since the crash occurred; which was only moments before.
'Invasion, Invasion. All students report to their closest emergency zone. Invasion, Invasion...'
'Stop,' Jake muttered breathlessly. 'I can teleport us closer to the entrance.'
The three boys were going to do all they could to help the teachers out with the invasion.
'Don't you think it would be better if Xander stayed behind?' Rawl directed his question to Jake.
'What,' Xander was infuriated by Rawl's idea. 'No I'm coming with you. I feel fine. Really.'
'But Xander... You do realise who must be invading. It's not a dumb test. It's The Way...'
'Shutup Rawl, I'm coming.' Xander was too determined to come for anyone to stop him, so they agreed to go together.
'Ok everyone lay a hand on me,' Jake spoke hastily. Time was of the essence. Rawl and Xander placed hands on Jake's chest and looked at each other with sad eyes.
'Stay cool Xander,' Rawl muttered. Xander meant to laugh at the pun but it came out in a mixed chortled scream. Jake had teleported the trio to the top of the front entrances grand staircase.

Rawl decided it felt like his body was being scrunched up into a ball, a ball which exploded soon after. Xander said it felt more like "pure pain".
But they didn't have time to think about these things as they had arrived right in the middle of a fierce battle. Teachers were using all their abilities power against men, and women, dressed in black body suits: The Way.
Rawl's attention instantly focused on a teacher who had morphed into an eagle who was battling a member of the way who was shooting laser beams from his fingers. He wished he had that ability.

But there was no time to waste...
Rawl got out his battery.

NEXT BIT GUYS

Jake looked around at the chaos below him, then he thought, there should be more than three gang members, why have only three come? Whilst thinking this he looked at Xander and said,
“This is weird Xander... this is wrong.”
Xander seemed clueless as he got ready to battle. Rawl was already down the stairs with his battery, what a good idea to be in the open when charging up, but he thought he was the best. Jake looked around and ducked as a laser beam shot near him. He looked in the direction it came from and a mutant was staring at him from the ground. The person from the way said demoinically,
“Hey there, you would be great dead..”
Jake was surprised he said this but kept his cool and said,
“Well...you would be great blind, bitch.”
He smiled and shot white light at the man. He screamed loudly and fell to the floor screaming,
“My eyes. The arse has blinded me.”
Jake smiled at this and said to the man,
“Oops! I hurt you...” and then went up to the man and kicked him where it hurts. Rawl was helping a teacher fight a woman who could shoot fire and Xander was helping the teacher who was now an eagle. Xander did not look good at all, but he seemed to fight alright. Then all of a sudden the man that Jake attacked screamed,
“Guys! Lets go! RETREAT!” This resounded in the opening hall and then the enemies all ran out.
All the teachers looked at each other, then Jake saw Rawl, clutching onto his stomach. Jake ran down and said coyly,
“Ohh mister God, is hurt, should I help you? Wait you do not need help do you...”
Jake felt guilty for saying this but he had mixed feelings about Rawl. Then he said out loud to all who were there,
“That was not right. There should have been more. That was too easy.”
The teachers looked and seemed to agree the head teacher said,
“Right, red alert from now on to all. All rules for attacks are now on. I will call for backup from SAPI.”
Jake said questioningly, “SAPI?”
The head teacher expected this question and said dryly, “Special Abilities Police and Intelligence.”
Rawl then winced and grabbed his wound. Xander noticed and ran up to him, Jake said in a defining voice,
“Well, I will take Xander and Rawl back up to our dorms. Would you like us to come to see you at all?”
Jake felt good to have a sense of control, he guessed Rawl would not like this, but he was hurt, Jake wasn’t.
The teachers all looked to each other and nodded,
“Yes all three of you to come down, at 7pm after dinner for a meeting in the underground room. Rawl will know where to go.”
Jake nodded the held onto Xander’s and Rawl’s shoulders and said quietly,
“Xander’s Room”
Luckily when they appeared, Jake seemed to be accurate this time as he ended up in the bathroom of Xander’s Room which he was pleased about, then Rawl moaned again. He was obviously hurt. Xander took him to his bed and lay him down and said despairingly,
“We need to get help! Quickly go now!”
Jake just stood there staring at Rawl, Rawl then said whilst in pain,
“Jake can heal. Jake?”
Jake didn’t say anything, then he sighed and ripped Rawl’s shirt off. He had a burn, nothing too bad, and Jake placed his hands on Rawls skin, Rawl winced as he did this, and then saw his burn heal as Jake healed him.
Jake then stepped back expressionless, Rawl looked to him and said,
“Thanks Jake! I owe you.”
Jake laughed and said back sarcastically,
“You do not owe me anything. I am sorry for everything I got wrong guys. But Rawl, maybe you aren’t as invincible as you think you are. Bye Xander.”
Before Rawl could reply, Jake ran out of the room.

I AM GUESSING RILEY IS GOING TO CORRECT THIS SO I DNT KNOW LOL!

BYE GUYS XXX