My tears fall slapping the
cement, soaking my pillow.
I wish I could ride the
tempest of ill fortune to
your doorstep so you could
hold me tightly in your arms,
so you could steal me away
and shiled me from agony. Oh
how I wish that dream would
come true, happily
ever after.
I like this alot. It is very effective and concise, but it doesn't loose any eloquence because of that.
The only confusing bit is the opening line "tears fall slapping the cement, soaking my pillow"...unless you are sleeping outside
Forgetting that, it is a great poem
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